This isMiss sky's living room.Miss sky's living room is large. itlooks comfortable. i like it .

There arepots of flowers on thewindow sill. Some flowers are bathingin the sun,so these flowers are beautiful.

There is an air conditioner in the corner ofthe room. There are another pots of flowers on the floor near the air conditioner .

There isa big television on theTV-set case(是呢，太粗心了，多个字母意思相差老远了）. It is on the right.and the television is betweenthe loud speaker box andmusic center.

There is a sword on the televison.There is a Table calendar on the stereo.

There is a coffee tablein the middle of the room. There are some fruit on the coffee table.

我采纳了你们意见，改过来了。

在你的作文的基础上改写，供参考：

This is Miss sky's living room. It looks spacious and comfortable. There on the window sill stand some pots of flowers. Others are on the floor nearby. All flowers are bathing in the sun and look beautiful. They are so pleasant to my eyes（赏心悦目）. You can see an air conditioner standing in the corner beside the window, in front of which is a pot of tall plants with lots of green stalks and leaves. Seen on the other side of the room is a very big TV-set sitting on the television set case, which locates betweenthe loud speaker boxes of the music center. On top of the TV-set is a good-looking rack holding an antique sword while a lovely calendar standing upright on the stereo box. Opposite to the TV-set is a coffee table lying almost in the middle of the room, and some fruits stay quietly in their places at one of the front corners of the table. Oh, what a nice parlor! I like it.

it seems comfortable.

there are pots of flowers on thewindow sill

Some flowers bathe in the sun，so they are beautiful.首字母都要大写的哦～

there is an air conditioner in the corner ofthe room

there are another pot of plowers？ on the floor near the air conditioner .

there isa big television on theTV-set cause.

what do you want express??

and the television is betweenthe loud speaker box andmusic center.

there isa big television on theTV-set cause.

what do you want express??

tezukazyunko 发表于 2009-9-14 20:51 [url=https://www.enfamily.cn/static/image/common/back.gif

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有一个大电视在电视柜上。case 写成 cause了[1_12]

Some flowers bathe in the sun，so they are beautiful.首字母都要大写的哦～

tezukazyunko 发表于 2009-9-14 20:42 [url=https://www.enfamily.cn/static/image/common/back.gif

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全部小写都形成习惯了，以后注意。

9# 严淼

我给你的参考用词不是cause，你多写了一个字母。查一下去。以后要细心一点。你的单复数概念用的不纯熟，要多练，使形成条件反射。“沐浴在阳光下”，按照片的情景，是否应该用现在进行时呢？你考虑一下。

总的来说比第一次写得好多了。继续努力。

2# tezukazyunko

it seems comfortable.

是否用looks更好些呢？

在你的作文的基础上改写，供参考：

This is Miss sky's living room. It looks spacious and comfortable. There on the window sill stand some pots of flowers. Others are on the floor nearby. All flowers are ...

zykenglish 发表于 2009-9-16 11:40 [url=https://www.enfamily.cn/static/image/common/back.gif

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写得真好，看这样的文章是种享受。

14# 严淼

my pleasure.

老师写的太好了啊。佩服佩服。

老师写的太好了啊。佩服佩服。

CalmSky 发表于 2009-9-16 18:50 [url=https://www.enfamily.cn/static/image/common/back.gif]https://www.enfamily.cn/static/image/common/back.gif[/url]

你终于还是来论坛了。