Lesson 44 改写 Out of the forest



Lili did not think of the risk she was taking when she walked through a forest behind a man and a woman, because the man seemed like her husband .

The man and the woman are very good friends , when the woman was in trouble she always came to the man.

One day ,they walked across a small road beside Lili while she was having a picnic at the edge of a forest with her classmates .The woman talked something about her marriage with the man , she said that her family was broken and ,with the heart of her husband in another lady’s possession. After a while , both of them started walking into the woods . Lili got so angry that she ran after them , she was soon near them , but she held her breath and continued to follow them slowly , when she caught up with them ,she saw that they had sat down on the grass and the woman was going through the contents of her handbag , when she took out a piece of paper which was the divorce agreement and she handed it to that man . Lili rushed up to her and got it quickly .the woman got such a fright that she dropped the bag and she was shocked standing there . Lili ran straight at her angrily , “ your heart needs mending ” she said , “ but you mustn’t do anything to hurt another one ”, and then , she hole her hsuband’s hand walked away .

because the man seemed like her husband

我觉得用looked like 比较好，如果要用seem的话，应该是seemd to be吧？

The man and the woman are very good friends , when the woman was in trouble she always came to the man. 两个the man？有点重复了，换成she always turned to him for help!

she said that her family was broken,for the heart of her husband was in another lady’s possession

but you should never do anything to hurt another one ”, then , she held her hsuband’s hand and walked away .

just my views

tezukazyunko 您好： 太好了， 我来过几次了， 看到这些建议很兴奋， 嘻嘻， 明白你指出的这些了。 谢谢你我的好老师和版主。