<FONT face="Courier New" color=#0938f7 size=2><STRONG>There are many women serving in the army,the navy and the sir force. What do you think of females joining the armed forces? </STRONG></FONT>
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<STRONG><FONT face="Courier New" size=2>Nowadays there is a heated dispute as to whether women should offer compulsory military service as men. There are people on both sides who have strong feelings. </FONT></STRONG>
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<STRONG><FONT face="Courier New" size=2>Some people are against female soldiers and argue that the positions in the army are not suitable for female. From their point of view, women are undoubtedly overshadowed by their opposite sex in terms of physique. Since they can lift less weight and move less swiftly, they might as well deliver their weapons to men in order to decrease the number of casualty. Furthermore, the job calls for its candidates utmost fortitude and perseverance which are usually portrayed as psychological characters of a male.</FONT></STRONG>
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<STRONG><FONT face="Courier New" size=2>However, the other side of the coin has voiced completely opposite attitude, insisting that women are obliged to provide the service equally. They firmly hold that it’s not only the men but also the women are duty-bound to contribute to the peace or do some voluntary work for their mother town since they are fostered under the same circumstance. They also believe that it is not always the case that women are pleased to accept the privilege free from military service. In their opinion, as long as women are unwilling to be regarded as weaker sex, they have to strive for their equality in the society in all ways including sharing military service. Moreover, they particularly point out that there are also many positions in the army that women are more qualified than men. For example, the military doctors and nurses are expected to be skilled as well as caring and considerate on which the majority of men would be inferior. </FONT></STRONG>
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<STRONG><FONT face="Courier New" size=2>To conclude, it is mainly the military service’s special requirements that are likely to keep women away from the army and war fields. However, not all the positions are unsuitable for female. Personally, I side with the women soldiers’ advocates for both reasons of sex equality and practical need of her country.</FONT></STRONG>

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<FONT size=5>Dear lazybone,</FONT>
<FONT size=5>Once again, your variation of words and expression are beautiful. However, I see sort of problem in your structure. You don't even put forward your own opinion in the first paragraph, however, you just conclude your entire article with it. </FONT>
<FONT size=5>I think it's really a big problem. You know, this is an article about agree or disagree, so the key of writing is to convince your readers that your personal viewpoint is justifiable. How to achieve this? </FONT>
<FONT size=5>There's no doubt that all your illustrations should be one-topic-focused: if you just stand in one side, you should show why this side is correct, however the other side is wrong. If you don't take a clear attitude about both sides, then it's all right for you to show the readers why each side has its own background to stand, so have you seen what I mean? I think you should be very careful in your writing about this kind of topic, and just think about my suggestion.</FONT>
<FONT size=5>Anyway, you've made such an amazing progress in your writings, just keep on, and all your best with your prepration for that test.</FONT>
<FONT size=5>Sincere yours, </FONT>
<FONT size=5>Joan</FONT>