2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：道德滑坡

　　①Looking at this thought-provokingpicture(加“which was”,其中which引导定语从句，修饰picture;was和后面的depicted构成被动语态)symbolically depicted by the drawer, I do realize theurgency to improve the moral standards nowadays. ②A pregnant woman, an old man and his littlegranddaughter stands(“stands”改为“stand”，该句主语为复数，主谓应保持一致)on the crowded bus, lookingat a young man who sits in the seat comfortably witha piece of black cloth covering his eyes, puzzledand indignant(“puzzled and indignant”是用来修饰the yong man, 或是作者“感到困惑和愤怒”，应表达清晰;若要表达作者的情感，可改为：...covering his eyes. I feel puzzled and indignant).①Thetemporary blind in the picture indicates a serious phenomenon in the modern society thatsome young people are suffering from moral decline. ②The reasons contributing to moraldecline are worth pondering. ③First, respecting the old and caring the young is abandoned bysome modern people, because they only care about their own benefits. ④Only if you couldprovide them with a great outcome(“a great outcome”改为“great outcomes”，和them保持一致),will they lend you a hand(“a hand”改为“hands”，和they保持一致) in exchange. ⑤In addition, theeducational system is also to blame(“be to blame for”意为“对……应负责任;应该为某事负责任”，如果要表述“教育体制也应对此负责”，可表达为： the educational system is also to blame for thephenomenon;如若要表述“教育体制也应受到责备”，可表达为the educational system should also tobe blamed). ⑥It emphasizes more on high marks at the expense of having few time to teachtraditional moral values in school which leads to people’s defect (“defect”为可数名词，此处应改为“defects”和people保持一致)on this issue.①It is high time that we fostered our moral values. ②For one thing, schools and governments should play an active role (“an active role”应改为“active roles”，前后主谓保持一致，主语为schools and governments)in advocating moral valuesand traditional virtues to teach the young. ③For another, individuals should learn more aboutvirtues and help people around with a warm heart(“a warm heart”改为“ warm hearts”,前后单复数保持一致). ④Only through our joint effort(“effort”应改为“efforts”,前后单复数保持一致), could werecollect the virtues.

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　　文章亮点：文章结构完整，每个段落的功能基本得以体现。文章错误：①语法错误：文章出现了一些语法错误，比如被动语态、名词单复数形式等。②句法错误：有的句子表达不够清楚。比如第一段第②句，第二段第⑤句。修改意见：文章整体结构不错，但是要注意一些细节，避免不必要的错误。本文中，单复数一致问题较多，希望作者在完成习作时应多检查，尽量减少此类错误。

　　参考分数：12分(满分20分)