题目信息：

Emily Sanders, a 25-year-old from Detroit, Michigan, set out on December 23rd with high hopes of reaching Toronto to meet her boyfriend for Christmas. Although she had heard warnings about an approaching snowstorm, she didn’t give it much thought. She assumed that much like in Michigan, police would simply detour (使绕道) traffic around any closed sections of the highway. But that didn’t happen. As the snow came down more and more heavily, Emily was directed off the highway. She drove on for a while and found herself on an unfamiliar road toward a Canadian town.

The blinding whiteout made driving nearly impossible. At one point, Emily’s car got stuck. After a struggle, she managed to free the vehicle and continued inching along the snow-covered road. As night fell, panic set in. While Emily was driving on a narrow stretch of road, her car slid into a ditch (沟). She tried to call for help but found no signal on her phone. Seeing no hope of immediate rescue, Emily decided to spend the night in her car. She wrapped herself in a blanket, waiting for morning. To stay warm, she ran her engine for a few minutes every now and then. Eventually, she fell asleep.

Emily awoke to a gentle knock on her car window. Standing outside were Daniel and his wife Rachel, who noticed the stranded (被困的) vehicle on their way home and stopped to see if they could help. When Emily rolled down the window, Rachel asked if she was okay and told her it was not safe to stay overnight in the car. With genuine warmth in her voice, Rachel said they could take Emily to a nearby cafe they knew. Grateful and relieved, Emily accepted the offer.

In the cafe, the couple bought Emily a hot chocolate and listened patiently as she explained her desperate situation: she was about a hundred miles from her destination, her car was completely stuck, and her entire holiday plan could be ruined.

提示句1：Daniel and Rachel suggested that Emily continue her journey by train.

提示句2：Three days later, Emily returned to get her car.



【写作指导】

一、

话题分类

感人救助类

二、

记叙文要素

1. 人物：Emily Sanders（25岁，来自密歇根州底特律）、男朋友、警察、Daniel、Rachel（说话带有真诚的温暖）

2. 时间：12月23日、夜幕降临、三天后

3. 地点：底特律到多伦多的高速公路、陌生的加拿大城镇道路、路边的沟里、附近的咖啡馆

4. 事件：Emily Sanders在暴风雪中开车去见男朋友，不慎驶入陌生的道路，车子滑进沟里被困且手机没有信号，面临在这个寒冷天气中独自过夜甚至整个假期计划被毁的绝望困境。幸好Daniel和Rachel发现她并带她到附近咖啡馆，并听她说了自己的困难。

三、

原文重难点词汇



四、

原文情节梳理

12月23日，Emily Sanders驱车前往多伦多与男友过圣诞节。遭遇暴风雪后，她被迫驶离高速，迷失在陌生道路上。由于视线极差，车子滑进沟里且手机毫无信号。绝望中她只能在车里熬过寒冷的一夜。第二天早上，Daniel和妻子Rachel发现了她，不仅热心询问，还将其带到咖啡馆，给她买热巧克力，并耐心倾听她车子被困、离目的地尚远且计划受阻的糟糕处境。

五、

翻译提示句

1. Daniel和Rachel建议Emily乘坐火车继续她的旅程。

2. 三天后，Emily回来取她的车。

六、

续写情节推理

关键思考过程：由提示句2可知，Emily三天后回来取车，这说明车辆在她离开期间被安全地留在了某处。所以第一段要体现：1. Emily接受了乘火车离开的建议；2. Daniel和Rachel帮助她前往火车站并妥善安排了被困的车辆；3. Emily顺利搭乘火车离开并心怀感激。

第一段：（接受建议+搭乘火车）：Daniel和Rachel建议Emily乘坐火车继续她的旅程，Emily接受了这个主意，Daniel提议把车暂时留在这里由他们照看，随后这对夫妇驱车将她送到了最近的火车站，Emily买好车票顺利登上了火车，看着窗外热心的夫妇挥手告别，她原本恐慌的心里充满了温暖与希望。

第二段：（重返取车+传递善意）：三天后，Emily回来取她的车，此时她已经在多伦多和男朋友度过了一个完美的圣诞节，暴雪已经停止且天气放晴，Daniel不仅帮她把车从沟里拖了出来，还清理了车身的积雪，Emily紧紧拥抱这对夫妇表达深深的谢意，并在驾车返程时决心将这份无私的善意传递给更多的人。结尾点明陌生人的善意能够化解暴风雪的寒冷，温暖人生的旅途。

小结：整体需围绕“Emily在好心人的帮助下顺利换乘火车完成旅程，随后返回取车并感悟善意”展开。

七、

场景核心词汇积累



八、

句式积累

1 . 动作链：

Daniel pulled out his phone, opened the train app, and typed in Toronto as the destination.

Daniel拿出手机，打开火车应用，输入多伦多作为目的地。

2 . 主从复合句：

When Emily heard that there was still a train to Toronto that day, tears of joy welled up in her eyes.

当 Emily 听说当天还有一班去多伦多的火车时，喜悦的泪水涌上了她的眼眶。

3 . 无灵主语句：

A surge of warmth and gratitude washed over Emily as she watched the couple waving on the platform.

当Emily看着这对夫妇在站台上挥手时，一股温暖与感激之情涌上心头。

4 . with 复合结构：

With her luggage packed, Emily followed Daniel and Rachel to the nearby train station.

收拾好行李后，Emily 跟着Daniel和Rachel去了附近的火车站。

5 . 非谓语动词：

Hearing the news that her car had been towed safely, Emily breathed a sigh of relief.

听到她的车被安全拖出来的消息，Emily 松了一口气。

6 . 独立主格结构：

The car repaired, Emily was ready to start her journey back home.

车修好了，Emily 准备踏上回家的路。

7 . 强调句：

It was Daniel and Rachel's kindness that saved Emily's Christmas holiday.

正是Daniel和Rachel的善意拯救了 Emily 的圣诞假期。

8 . 倒装句：

Never had Emily met such warm-hearted strangers before.

Emily 以前从未遇到过这么热心的陌生人。

9 . 虚拟语气：

If it hadn't been for Daniel and Rachel's help, Emily would have spent Christmas alone in her car.如果没有Daniel 和Rachel 的帮助，Emily 本会独自在车里过圣诞节。

10 . 修辞手法：

Their kindness was like a warm light in the cold winter snowstorm.

他们的善意就像寒冷冬日暴风雪中的一束暖光。

11 . 复合句式 1：

Emily bought a box of chocolates as a gift, and she wrote a heartfelt note to express how much their help meant to her.

Emily 买了一盒巧克力作为礼物，还写了一张真挚的便条，表达他们的帮助对她有多重要。

12 . 复合句式 2：

Much to her amazement, not only had Daniel towed the vehicle out of the ditch, but he had also cleared the heavy snow off its roof.

令她极为惊叹的是，Daniel不仅把车从沟里拖了出来，还清除了车顶上厚厚的积雪。

范文

范文一

Daniel and Rachel suggested that Emily continue her journey by train. Emily hesitated briefly — her car was still sitting in the ditch. Seeing her concern, Daniel offered to take care of it and call a local towing company later. Relieved, Emily gratefully accepted his thoughtful advice. Then the couple drove her to the nearest railway station and helped her buy a ticket to Toronto. Her worries slowly melted away. As the train pulled out, she watched them waving through the window. Deep gratitude filled her heart, and she regained hope for the coming Christmas.

Three days later, Emily returned to get her car. She had enjoyed a wonderful Christmas with her boyfriend in Toronto, and the heavy snow had stopped completely. She soon spotted her car parked neatly by the road, with all the snow cleared off. It turned out that Daniel had had the car towed out of the ditch. Emily drove to the couple’s home and expressed her sincere thanks. This special experience made her realize how powerful the kindness of strangers could be. She decided that, from then on, she would help people in trouble whenever she could.

翻译：

Daniel和Rachel建议Emily改乘火车继续行程。Emily稍稍犹豫了一下——她的车还陷在沟里。看出了她的顾虑，Daniel 主动提出会帮忙照看车辆，稍后会联系当地的拖车公司。Emily 放下心来，欣然接受了这份贴心的提议。随后夫妻俩开车送她到最近的火车站，还帮她买了前往多伦多的车票。她心中的忧虑渐渐消散。火车缓缓驶离时，她望着二人在窗外挥手道别，满心感激，也对即将到来的圣诞节重拾了希望。

三天后，Emily回来取车。她在多伦多和男友度过了一个愉快的圣诞节，漫天大雪也早已停歇。她很快看到车子整齐地停在路边，车身上的积雪也清理得干干净净。原来是Daniel 找人把车从沟里拖了出来。Emily 驱车来到夫妻俩家中，向他们表达了诚挚的谢意。这段特别的经历让她体会到陌生人的善意拥有多么强大的力量。她下定决心，往后只要力所能及，就会主动向身处困境的人伸出援手。

点评：

① 情节完整，呼应自然：第一段明确交代Daniel联系工作人员处理陷在沟里的车，第二段交代车已被拖出并清理积雪，前后细节形成闭环，逻辑严密。

② 情感递进清晰：从“hesitated briefly”到“Her worries slowly melted away”，再到“Deep gratitude filled her heart”，细腻展现了Emily从焦虑到感恩的心理变化。

③ 画面感强：如“watched them waving outside the window”“car parked neatly by the road, with all the snow cleared off”等简洁描写，生动可感。

④ 主题升华得当：结尾点出“realize how powerful the kindness of strangers could be”并决定今后帮助他人，自然点出了善意传递的正能量。

范文二

Daniel and Rachel suggested that Emily continue her journey by train. Emily began to voice her concern about her car, which was still stuck in the ditch. Daniel promised to have a towing service pull it out and keep an eye on it until she was back. Reassured, Emily nodded in agreement. The couple then drove her to the station, comforting her gently along the way. At the station, they bought her a ticket and helped carry her luggage onto the platform. Watching through the train window as the couple waved in the cold wind, Emily felt warmth spread through her. Gone were the panic and hopelessness of the earlier part of the night.

Three days later, Emily returned to get her car. Having spent a joyful Christmas with her boyfriend, she found the whole town bathed in bright sunshine after the terrible snowstorm. Much to her delight, her car had already been towed out and thoroughly cleaned. Touched by their kindness, Emily drove to the couple’s home and conveyed her deepest thanks. This tough trip became a precious memory for her. She came to understand that there is still real warmth in the world, and she would keep this kindness alive by passing it on.

翻译：

Daniel和Rachel建议Emily改乘火车继续行程。Emily说起自己的顾虑——她的车还陷在沟里。Daniel 承诺会联系拖车把车拖出来，并帮忙照看，直到她回来。放下心来的 Emily 点头应允。随后夫妻俩开车送她前往车站，一路上柔声安慰着她。到了车站，两人帮她买好车票，还帮她把行李搬到站台。Emily透过火车车窗望着寒风中挥手道别的夫妻俩，心中暖意融融。上半夜的慌乱与绝望已然烟消云散。

三天后，Emily回来取车。她刚和男友度过了愉快的圣诞节，发现此时暴风雪早已散去，整座小镇沐浴在明媚的阳光里。令她惊喜的是，车子不仅早已被拖出沟渠，还被彻底清洗干净。这份善意深深打动了Emily，她驱车来到夫妻俩的家中，向他们致以诚挚的谢意。这段坎坷的旅程就此成为她心中珍贵的回忆。她也渐渐明白，世间始终存有真情暖意，而她也会将这份善意继续传递下去。

点评：

① 用词精准有文采：如“voice her concern”“warmth spread through her”“bathed in bright sunshine”等表达，提升了叙述的文学性和感染力。

② 心理刻画细腻：通过“voice her concern”“panic and hopelessness gone”“much to her delight”等短语，生动呈现Emily情绪起伏与最终释然。

③ 环境对比巧妙：第二段以“bright sunshine after the terrible snowstorm”与首段暴风雪形成鲜明反差，象征困境散去、希望重现。

④ 立意深刻温暖：结尾“keep this kindness alive by passing it on”不仅强调世间温暖存在，更点出主动传递善意，使故事余韵悠长。



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命题导向

一、价值导向：

弘扬善意与感恩，传递社会正能量

题目为“感人救助类”，核心在于通过陌生人之间的无私帮助，引导考生感悟人与人之间的温暖。命题期望考生在续写中自然表达：困境中主动伸出援手、受助后真诚感恩、并将善意延续下去。这与社会主义核心价值观中的“友善”“和谐”高度契合，也符合立德树人的育人目标。

二、能力导向：

考查逻辑衔接与伏笔回收

命题通过两个提示句制造了明显的“时间跳跃”和“任务缺口”：

提示句1“改乘火车”→ 需要考生解释：她接受建议了吗？车怎么办？她怎么去车站？

提示句2“三天后取车”→ 需要考生回答：车为何能取出？谁帮忙拖车？车况如何？

命题导向非常明确：要求考生具备严密的因果推理和伏笔回收能力。原文中已埋下“车陷沟里”“无信号”“恐慌”等细节，续写必须给出合理解释（如Daniel联系拖车、清理积雪等）。若忽略这些伏笔，续写就会逻辑断裂。

三、思维导向：

培养“困境突破”的问题解决思维

题目模式为“困境突破类”，Emily面临三重困境：

物理困境：车陷雪沟，无法行驶

通信困境：手机无信号，无法求救

心理困境：恐慌、绝望、圣诞计划可能落空

命题期望考生在续写中展示如何一步步突破困境：接受建议（心理突破）→ 改乘火车（物理突破）→ 委托照看车辆（责任突破）→ 返回取车（结局突破）。这训练了学生在真实情境中分析问题、寻找替代方案、合理分配资源的能力。

四、情感导向：

刻画细腻的心理变化曲线

命题不满足于情节完整，更要求情感真实且富有层次。从原文结尾“desperate situation”到续写第一段接受帮助后的“relieved/grateful”，再到第二段取车时的“delighted/touched”，最后到“决心帮助他人”——这是一条完整的从绝望到希望、从受助到助人的情感升华路径。命题导向表明：优秀的续写不是冷冰冰的叙事，而是能打动读者的心理描写。

五、文化导向：

渗透安全意识与地域常识

题目多处隐含对考生“生活常识与跨文化意识”的考查：

暴风雪中在车内过夜的危险性（一氧化碳中毒、失温）→ Rachel明确说“not safe to stay overnight”，引导考生关注安全知识。

加拿大冬季交通特点→ 列车作为替代方案合理可行。

美国底特律到加拿大温莎/多伦多的地理路线→ 考生虽不必精确了解，但应意识到“跨国”和“不同地区应对暴风雪方式可能不同”（原文提及警察绕道在密歇根常见，但加拿大没发生）。

命题导向提示：读后续写不仅考查语言，也考查考生对现实世界的基本认知。

六、写作导向：

强调“具体行动胜过空洞赞美”

命题通过救助者Daniel夫妇的行为模式，给出了“什么是真正有效的帮助”的范例：不是同情叹息，而是实际行动——停车询问、告知风险、带到咖啡馆、买热饮、倾听、建议改乘火车、照看车辆、联系拖车、送站买票、事后清理积雪。命题期望考生在续写中模仿这种“用具体细节展现善良”的手法，而非泛泛而谈“他们很善良”。这是对记叙文“展示而非说教”写作原则的强化。

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